How to Get Stronger Headlines Out of Your Copywriter

The headline and lead are considered the most important pieces of copy that make or break direct marketing campaigns. So why do some headlines come out so feeble? I think it’s a combination of reasons. In my column for Today at Target Marketing Magazine, I share six culprits and two ways to review copy and strengthen weak headlines. 

If your headline doesn’t grab the reader, all the effort to write the rest of a promo will probably be a waste. Some copywriters suggest that 80 percent of time should be allocated to writing the headline and lead. 

Personally, I think it’s less about time and more about ideas.

There are hundreds of winning direct mail control packages available for review (and to wisely steal from) at Who’s Mailing What. And there are plenty of books and copywriting programs available with proven formulas, created by successful copywriters that are a lot less costly to purchase and apply than producing a losing promo.

Before I share two approaches to supercharge your headlines, there are, I believe, several culprits behind weak headlines that should be overcome first:

1.    Lack of Information. The lack of information about the product, market and benefits usually results in the copywriter lobbing a powder puff headline that’s cute and doesn’t sell a thing. If you’re the product or marketing manager, it’s your responsibility to deliver a list of all features and benefits to the copywriter.

2.    No Research. This is a shared responsibility of everyone, marketing managers and copywriters alike. Look for research studies that support the need for your product to build credibility in your message. 

3.    No Competitive Intel. The marketing team should have samples of competitive products and promotional materials. It can be tough to get samples of direct mail, but in this day and age, a website surely exists for competitors.

4.    Lack of Copywriting Experience. We all start our careers somewhere, so it’s tough to suggest that you bypass an eager, up-and-comer copywriter. But if you are working with someone a little green behind the ears, point them in directions where they can hone their skill about how to write headlines by reading books, going to seminars, or other training (in a moment I’ll share another resource I recommend). 

5.    Lack of Identifying the USP. The marketing team should work with the creative team to identify the unique selling proposition to set your product or service apart from competitors.

6.    Approval by Committee. A great headline isn’t likely to come via a committee of well-meaning critiques. Let the copywriter do his or her job. Better yet, read on for a better solution for producing the strongest headline possible with a team approach.

Two Recommendations

If you want to supercharge your headline and lead, I can think of no more powerful and effective tool than engaging in a peer review between the copywriter and a handful of marketing staff. More than a decade ago I was introduced to a peer review system that helped me write a headline, and carry the theme through an entire direct mail package, that resulted in a 60 percent lift over a long-time control package. Millions were mailed. That copy review process introduction came from American Writers and Artists (AWAI).

You can read about the AWAI peer review system by clicking this link, but in short, you gather a small group of people together to evaluate a headline and rate it on a scale of 1 (low) to 4 (high). If the average is under 3.2, brainstorm ways to improve it. If the rating is really low (perhaps 2.5 or lower), then it’s probably best to start all over. In all cases, let the copywriter do the job of rewriting and editing. 

Another copy strengthening system that I like and teach for AWAI students is called the C.U.B.A. review. It’s simple, but effective. While reviewing copy, you ask peers in a group if any copy in the headline or lead is:

•    Confusing
•    Unbelievable
•    Boring
•    Awkward

Both the peer review and C.U.B.A. are fully explained in Copy Logic, a book by Michael Masterson and Mike Palmer.

If you’re having trouble with writing strong headlines, try these two peer review systems. They work, and I speak from first-hand experience.


Comment /Source

Gary Hennerberg

After a lot of years in marketing and sales, this is what I know works:

Stories sell. Think unique. Stimulate emotion. Close deals. And here are a few other gems from my new book, “Crack the Customer Mind Code.” Know the persona, interpret your offer and let your prospect give themselves permission to buy. That’s how the brain is wired. It’s how people think.

What else? When I’m not breaking down complex topics (or ones marketers over-complicate) into easy-to-grasp stories that sell, I crunch numbers. Manage projects. Write. Teach. Lead.